Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

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Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Mon Apr 23, 2012 1:30 am

one line at a time
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The light disappeared from the roads
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby erutxet » Thu Apr 26, 2012 3:57 am

we snorted until dawn made us crawl back into our sarcophagi
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Thu Apr 26, 2012 4:06 am

That's what we called the pods over the genetic combinations of horse and elephant that we had created. Sarcophagi... the chariots pulled by steeds of Hell.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby erutxet » Thu Apr 26, 2012 4:11 am

We're on our way to Hell to pick up fresh feed for the steeds, and also to try and save our friend Raymond. He's died and gone to Hell, cries eternally, chained to a lake of fire. Bubbles are always forming on his skin, he's burning from the inside out. He's chained! All he has is his ipod classic to comfort him, and he listens to pixies - tame on repeat because he can't change the song, the ipod is just out of reach. It's a good song he says, but it just all gets so repetitive.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Duality » Fri Apr 27, 2012 11:47 am

Dont eat my baby
"A truth is not necessary, because we negatively are not able to conceive the actual existence of the opposite thereof;but a truth is necessary when we positively are able to apprehend that the negation thereof includes an inevitable contradiction. It is not that that we can see how the opposite comes to be true, but it is that the opposite can not possibly be true." -R.L. Dabney

"Those then who know not wisdom and virtue, and are always busy with gluttony and sensuality, go down and up again as far as the mean; and in this region they move at random throughout life, but they never pass into the true upper world; thither they neither look, nor do they ever find their way, neither are they truly filled with true being, nor do they ever taste of pure and abiding pleasure." -Socrates
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby erutxet » Fri Apr 27, 2012 12:04 pm

She's already dead
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Fri Apr 27, 2012 12:39 pm

This is not proper christian talk...
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby erutxet » Fri Apr 27, 2012 12:55 pm

If you would look around you (scroll up,) you would notice that we are in Hell ...
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Fri Apr 27, 2012 1:46 pm

Christians aren't welcome in Hell. Why do you troll?
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Fri Apr 27, 2012 2:57 pm

Hey! I said one line at a time.

This qualifies as the last one:

"That's what we called the pods over the genetic combinations of horse and elephant that we had created."

this sounds very Homeric, so I approve.

Please, restrain yourselves assholes.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby erutxet » Fri Apr 27, 2012 9:48 pm

Punk is not dead
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Fri Apr 27, 2012 9:56 pm

FC, this epic poem turned to 1st person narrative... perhaps this needs to be explained? Maybe it is dialogue from one of the characters?
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 11:03 am

Ah yes, like in an introduction to the chapter, perhaps.
"Chapter one: X and his posse set out to do Y. The poet take on the perspective of X."
Who is X? What shall be the name of our hero?

Wait, I forgot how the poem went...

The light disappeared from the roads
we snorted until dawn made us crawl back into our sarcophagi
That's what we called the pods over the genetic combinations of horse and elephant that we had created.
[ and ok let's allow ]
Sarcophagi... the chariots pulled by steeds of Hell.
[ and maybe ]
We're on our way to Hell to pick up fresh feed for the steeds
[ I don't like this Raymond character. I'ts not an epic name. ]
Twenty thousand ivory-skinned prisoners from the weeping city in our trail
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Sat Apr 28, 2012 5:12 pm

The white ashes from the funeral pyres covering their faces.

Fixed Cross wrote:We're on our way to Hell to pick up fresh feed for the steeds

*We were?
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Sat Apr 28, 2012 5:12 pm

I say we wait to see what else he (or she?) says before giving himher a name.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:03 pm

FilmSnob wrote:I say we wait to see what else he (or she?) says before giving himher a name.

Yes, good.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:11 pm

FilmSnob wrote:The white ashes from the funeral pyres covering their faces.

Their barbaric laments no match for the all-swallowing wind, meeting us head on.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:15 pm

FilmSnob wrote:The white ashes from the funeral pyres covering their faces.

Fixed Cross wrote:We're on our way to Hell to pick up fresh feed for the steeds

*We were?

If you really ask, no.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:17 pm

A wind from the North, and the Northern Gods...
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:19 pm

Fixed Cross wrote:FilmSnob wrote: The white ashes from the funeral pyres covering their faces.

Fixed Cross wrote:We're on our way to Hell to pick up fresh feed for the steeds

*We were?

If you really ask, no.

I meant that we should keep verb tense continuity. Though maybe not doing so would give it a nice bardic touch...
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:23 pm

The gifts we brought them made them howl across the plains.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:27 pm

Among us, only Galdria, though remaining conscious, recoiled in fear.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:29 pm

FilmSnob wrote:
Fixed Cross wrote:FilmSnob wrote: The white ashes from the funeral pyres covering their faces.

Fixed Cross wrote:We're on our way to Hell to pick up fresh feed for the steeds

*We were?

If you really ask, no.

I meant that we should keep verb tense continuity. Though maybe not doing so would give it a nice bardic touch...

Ah I was thinking in logistic terms, whether it would be practical to have steeds that have to be fed in hell.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Fixed Cross » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:32 pm

Then there was Barbeuth, openly cursing the Gods.
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Re: Epic Poem (call for a collective project)

Postby Pezerocles » Sat Apr 28, 2012 7:37 pm

A sleet of mechanical death showered the plains, and their [the Gods'] invitation was clear.
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