Flutter By

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Flutter By

Postby Ierrellus » Fri Oct 16, 2015 1:45 pm

While sun puts food in flowers,
Poems flit across my mind;
And I must softly cast my net
To keep the powder on their wings.
"We must love one another or die." W.H.Auden
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Re: Flutter By

Postby Amorphos » Fri Oct 16, 2015 1:59 pm

Succinct and nice. I like the way you place a butterfly in the mind without having to state it, and used that as a metaphor for poetry or the spirit of perhaps.
The truth is naked,
Once it is written it is lost.
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Re: Flutter By

Postby Ierrellus » Fri Oct 16, 2015 2:25 pm

Thanks, Amorphos. I learned as a child that a butterfly cannot fly without the powder on its wings. It's a matter of balance, as poems should be.
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Re: Flutter By

Postby Amorphos » Fri Oct 16, 2015 6:53 pm

Yea it’s the coefficient of friction the dust denotes, without which the wings don’t connect with the air too well. So there’s another metaphor; without friction [an aggregate of entropy] a story or poem becomes meaningless. amazing what you can get from a few little words eh. :)
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